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She said create the world, so I did. I made it dark and dusty, coughed up from my own black lungs. I gave the trees an ashen hue and the ground a color to match the starless sky. The creatures were murmuring oozes, globs of drying acrylic that inked across the orb of my bubbling imagination.

Repulsing, it was in fact the product of an industrial mind. I was born from man's smog goddess and, if memory serves me, her breath was laced in exhaust which I inhaled nightly with her songs. She was soothing and complacent, her voice smokey like a hazy bar. No one could deny her features were hideous beyond belief. Her skin dripped pollution like morphine into veins, into deep red rivers to turn them ebony and clogged. Her eyes glistened obsidian, sharp and cold if you didn't know her at all. I knew she was lost and ashamed, as her mother, my grandmother, would often remind her of the destruction her presence caused. I loved her like grandmother nature never could.

Grandmother was ,indeed, a grand mother; full of herself, and rightfully so, she was beautiful. Shoulder blades smooth as sand dunes, hair blue and ever-moving. Her voice was a harmony of every heartbreaking, lovemaking bird song. The first time I laid eyes on her I wanted nothing more than banishment to the darkest corners of space - her beauty thundered and eroded my significance to an awful pebble. My mother was nothing more than a shadow come alive and grandmother nature wanted her suffocating daughter gone - swept away like cigarette smoke.

So mother and I gathered our clouds up into our lungs, soaked up chemicals we sweated in our separate stratospheric rooms and the air was clear for the first time. Man rejoiced, their hallelujahs pounding rejection onto my eardrums. Mother held my hand tight as cancerous cells and wept acid rain to dispel their unashamed disregard for our leaving. They settled, shrugged and raising their umbrellas went about their day. Still, the time for moving on was now. Mother bent down to my level, eyes glassy and black, "Sweetheart, create a world for you and me. Make a place where we will be loved for our horrid condition."

The taste of metal always on our tongue, carbon monoxide seeping through our pores, bathing in the radiation of our black hole sun; dank and disturbed is where we are loved.  
I don't even know...

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stash is being stupid so it's back to old school.

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Edit:

Oh, thank you so, so much for the DD! I'm honored.

:iconwritersink: please check this lovely, wonderful, amazing, awesomesauce group out.

Thanks for suggesting my piece, y'all!
and thank you ^thorns for featuring it!

I appreciate all the comments and favs every one! and thanks to anyone who just takes the time to read :)

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Edit: Beautiful illustration of it here [link]
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Given 2012-09-26
The Waste World by *0hgravity The suggester writes, "This is a great piece personifying Pollution, managing to make it seem almost beautiful in it's own sad way. The author uses some wonderful description for both Pollution, and the arrogance of Grandmother Nature." ( Suggested by WritersInk and Featured by thorns )
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ilyilaice Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
i love your choice of words. this is so descriptive. congrats on the DD! 
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you! :D
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013  Student Writer
wow - what an incredible story you've painted - the creations that kill & yet want to be loved & dwell in their own horrid mists. i love the supremacy exuding from grandmother nature - it's captured that ancient feeling of the roots of the earth from a new perspective.

that's truly what i've gotten from this, i suppose - another perspective, deliciously dark, to tuck away in my mind. we can relate to each other no matter how vast our differences; running away into ourselves... :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, what a lovely comment. thank you for sharing your thoughts!
I think you really got my meaning in it. I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
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Adagiobunny Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student Writer
of course! :) i love commenting, glad i could discern some of your intent. :D
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earthian101 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
how beautiful. Out of curiosity, who's the daughter (I'm assuming the narrator is a girl). 'Cause the mother is pollution and the grandmother is Mother Nature, so what would the daughter be? I loved how you personified these iconic concepts.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
something we are headed toward, I suppose.
it is intentionally ambiguous.

I'm glad you liked it :) thanks for the comment.
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brietta-a-m-f Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. Just wow. Are you thinking of expanding this? If not, I wish you would. The vast potential is this is obvious, and you have only just scratched the surface of possibilities!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
well I appreciate your enthusiasm for my piece!
I don't think I will expand this, though. It isn't
really what I normally write so I don't think I would
enjoy writing something longer on it. Maybe once I'm completely
bereft of ideas, I'll return to this but I don't know, sorry. :/
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brietta-a-m-f Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, well. I tried. I'll have to read some of the stuff that you normally write then, if the things you are less comfortable with are this good!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
and I'm really honored you liked it so much you wanted more!
ah, you're more than welcome to :)
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TotallyUncreativeMe Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You have such a beautiful style!
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much!
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TotallyUncreativeMe Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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sophiaazhou Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013

hello,
I just wanted to let you know I featured your work here. :huggle: :heart:
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug: thank you very much.
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Hey there I featured this piece here and just thought I'd let you know.

Thanks!
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, great personifications in this piece - so easy to imagine it all as a sort of an animation (Hayao Miyazaki could pull off something like this, I think). Very interesting and mythical.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
Yes, a few people have said something similar which is really cool. Did you see the illustration for it?
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I noticed the link to the illustration after I had sent the comment. :) I think it's pretty cool - the contrast between the two colourscapes is effective, and I like how Grandmother Earth's hair surrounds the two other characters.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh cool :)

yeah I liked the way her hair frames it as well. Thanks for taking a look!
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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trembling-knees Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
God this is gorgeous, especially "I made it dark and dusty, coughed up from my own black lungs."

:heart:
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :)
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
This is a beautifully written piece of prose. The imagery is great, and I enjoyed reading this completely. Many congrats on the well deserved DD.
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :)
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
You're very welcome! I hope one day I write well enough to be DD worthy like you and many other deviants :)
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm sure you will! just keep at it :)
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ssensory Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012   Writer
Thanks!
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MissOliviaLee Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Holy Christ I love this............... I'm writing a novel myself. This is so intensely inspiring...
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, glad to hear that!
Novels are no easy endeavor so I wish you luck with that.
I'm honored that this piece could be so inspiring :)

so, do you think it would be worth illustrating?
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MissOliviaLee Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Yes I absolutely do! I think there's a lot of fun to be had with this. Brainstorm commencing! Lets talk shop :)
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awesome!
yeah, what'd you have in mind?

I was thinking mother nature standing, turned away from the mother and child who are kind of huddled behind her?
just for general composition.
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MissOliviaLee Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Yeah, yeah! Thats what I was seeing too! I was thinking about how to put it all together though, and it might be cool to do a long vertical painting. Mother nature on top in light and beauty with her back turned so you can see her hair and shoulder blades and maybe her profile. Then around her lower back area the painting can fade down to blackness, the mother and child together below her shrouded in darkness and fog. When I read it I imagined their world like cracking mud with black ink rivers running through. Have you seen the film Princess Mononoke? If you have, I also pictured something like what happened after they killed the Great Forest Spirit.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah, that sounds great! the cracking mud with the black ink rivers would be a good addition.

no sorry, I haven't seen Princess Mononoke.
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MissOliviaLee Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Oh man... Princess Mononoke is a beautiful story. Give it a look-see if you can. I'm gonna go sketch some concepts for your piece :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'll put it on the list :)
awesome. can't wait to see 'em.
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SCFrankles Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Many congratulations on the DD! (I apologise for being so far behind ^^")

That is astounding language. You write with such confidence.
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!! (no worries :))

Thanks for that :D I'm happy you think so.
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Queshy Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012   Writer
This was an intriguing and eerily beautiful piece. You painted an image I never thought I'd see. Great job!

*Favorites*
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D you're too kind.
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Cionie Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Professional General Artist
Probably one of my favorite written pieces I've read on here :) Great job and congratz on the DD!
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, that's awesome; thank you!
:D
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PEHDTSCKJMBA Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Congratulations. :rose:
Really enjoyed the fourth paragraph.
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah,thank you :)
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The descriptions in this are fantastic. I don't often read prose, but I was pulled through by your masterful use of imagery and personification.
The message behind it, too, is unbelievable.
It's one of those stories that tells so much without ever directly spelling anything out.

It's beautiful in the darkest, most enrapturing way possible.
Definitely deserving of a DD! Congrats!
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, that's wonderful to know.

Thank you! I'm glad you think so :)
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Clouded-Rachel Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
This is beautiful. Gorgeous. (: That's all I can say, because I'm speechless.

Congrats on the DD!!!!!!! :D
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:icon0hgravity:
0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! I'm glad you like it :D

:happybounce:
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:iconclouded-rachel:
Clouded-Rachel Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
Welcome! :D
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