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most days, 
she is afraid 
to be.

some days, 
she looks into the sky 
and sees herself falling
and then 
ceasing 
to be.

"one day" she says, 
"one day I will be
afraid to be

dead."
does she say that?

if we don't know maybe we should ask.
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flummo Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Student Writer
We're all waiting to be ready, is the impression this gave me.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
definitely. most of all when we're alone.
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flummo Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: :hug:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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:iconghostoftheemptygrave:
I love the ending.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you!
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GhostOfTheEmptyGrave Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
You're welcome.
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I love the repetition of 'to be', and I love how sparse it looks on the page. :nod:

I agree with *intricately-ordinary, I love the contrast between the poem and the title.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much ^^

:thumbsup:
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Souzay Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2013  Student General Artist
interesting use of tenses. gives different meanings to the poem.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you ^^
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The more I read this, the more terrifying I find it.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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disrhythmic Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013
:heart: :heart: :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
^^; thank you
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i love the length of the title compared to the sparseness of the poem
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, thank you ^^ glad you picked up on that little juxtaposition.
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