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hey, wow,
you look...
great! you do!
I'm well,
and you?
good, good.
are you happy?
great!
am I? 

no, but here, have my
nervous laughter, 
see me turn myself
upside down when we run
into each other.

while you are shaking hands
and kissing babies
still smiling for smiling's sake,

I've seen the real you
crying into wine. I've felt you
stain my shirt black-streaked
with hidden away things
creased things, folded 
and-tucked-under-heavy
upturned-lip things
and in the process, you
soaked my soul in 
everything you.

spooning your vulnerability
was better than 
exchanging virginities
in one blind night,

better than the electric jolts
you sent burning up my arms
when you grabbed my hand
one day, out of the clear blue,

better than that first kiss 
when both our tensions 
dissolved into each other
like butter in a hot pan.

nothing has quite matched the night
when I saw you naked, saw you
emotionally undress for the first time:

I'm fine, you slipped off your shoulder
I'm okay, really you gently pushed down,
passed trembling excited knees.

I remember it like yesterday,
how you pressed my hand over your
insecurity; you asked me to kiss your
exposed hurt still raw as the scarring day,
pleaded with me in shakily caught breaths
to make you come
clean.

even now in this unexpected meeting,
as I hold my frown up
with these veiling pleasantries,
I see by your softening eyes 
we will never be strangers again. 
we will always be 
still-in-love exes because
I will always be the one 
you lost your walls to.
that there is a stopgap title.

I may or may not find the real title.
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here's to losing you by 0hgravity is, as the suggester says: "full of beautiful spins to readied phrases"; fresh language invigorates the majority of this work. ( Suggested by your-methamphetamine and Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i remember this one clearly, and am thrilled it was featured! congrats :love: you & your work deserve so much recognition, on dA and beyond. 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
aw, thank you! I'm glad to know it is such a memorable piece.

:D hope you've been well
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i've been awesome! tori concert happened!! life changed!!! hope you've been well also :) 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
haha, great ^^ how was the concert?
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HermioneFrost Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. You, my friend, have a way with words. There are so many great lines in this. Wonderful job! :clap:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you! that means a lot to me
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so raw and powerful. Really, really well done! Epic clap 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much! haha, love that gif ^^
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I know right? XD
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11zack Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
wow that was amazing. I can totally relate
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