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hey, wow,
you look...
great! you do!
I'm well,
and you?
good, good.
are you happy?
great!
am I? 

no, but here, have my
nervous laughter, 
see me turn myself
upside down when we run
into each other.

while you are shaking hands
and kissing babies
still smiling for smiling's sake,

I've seen the real you
crying into wine. I've felt you
stain my shirt black-streaked
with hidden away things
creased things, folded 
and-tucked-under-heavy
upturned-lip things
and in the process, you
soaked my soul in 
everything you.

spooning your vulnerability
was better than 
exchanging virginities
in one blind night,

better than the electric jolts
you sent burning up my arms
when you grabbed my hand
one day, out of the clear blue,

better than that first kiss 
when both our tensions 
dissolved into each other
like butter in a hot pan.

nothing has quite matched the night
when I saw you naked, saw you
emotionally undress for the first time:

I'm fine, you slipped off your shoulder
I'm okay, really you gently pushed down,
passed trembling excited knees.

I remember it like yesterday,
how you pressed my hand over your
insecurity; you asked me to kiss your
exposed hurt still raw as the scarring day,
pleaded with me in shakily caught breaths
to make you come
clean.

even now in this unexpected meeting,
as I hold my frown up
with these veiling pleasantries,
I see by your softening eyes 
we will never be strangers again. 
we will always be 
still-in-love exes because
I will always be the one 
you lost your walls to.
that there is a stopgap title.

I may or may not find the real title.
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Given 2014-06-23
here's to losing you by 0hgravity is, as the suggester says: "full of beautiful spins to readied phrases"; fresh language invigorates the majority of this work. ( Suggested by your-methamphetamine and Featured by ShadowedAcolyte )
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PippinFox Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This one really, really, hit home, especially that last bit...its nice to have it finally in words, to be honest. It's something I've been struggling with for a while. Thank you for this :heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, you're very welcome. it's such an honor to put someone's
feelings into words in a way they need

sorry for such a late reply!
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i remember this one clearly, and am thrilled it was featured! congrats :love: you & your work deserve so much recognition, on dA and beyond. 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
aw, thank you! I'm glad to know it is such a memorable piece.

:D hope you've been well
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i've been awesome! tori concert happened!! life changed!!! hope you've been well also :) 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
haha, great ^^ how was the concert?
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
it was beautiful! one of the greatest moments of my life. she has such a presence, the whole place had her current buzzing through :love: 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
^^ glad you enjoyed yourself. can cross it off your bucket list
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
definitely :)
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HermioneFrost Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. You, my friend, have a way with words. There are so many great lines in this. Wonderful job! :clap:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you! that means a lot to me
:bow:
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is so raw and powerful. Really, really well done! Epic clap 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much! haha, love that gif ^^
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StarlightComet Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I know right? XD
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11zack Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
wow that was amazing. I can totally relate
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, glad it resonated with you. Thank you!
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Turnish Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
Wow, that was beautiful!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!
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bittersweet-ink Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I absolutely love this. congrats on the DD!
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you do :) Thank you!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!

:hug:
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WrittenRuse Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
This is amazing.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you think so. Thank you!
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Eraezr Featured By Owner Edited Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Fuck TT_TT :(

Congrats on DD. :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw :( it is a painful one.

Thank you!
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YoshinaDG Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
*-*
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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TaylorNicoleReed Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I can't describe to you how much this gets to me. Having been in this position, (and still am on the occasion when he's in town), I know exactly how painful this is. How impossible it is to just 'go on' with everything. This piece sums it up exactly.


I'm not crying, it's just raining on my face. Well done.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah wow, that's bittersweet. I'm both glad and sad that this piece resonated so well with you. 

Aw, haha. Thank you so much! Hope you're not down too long.
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TaylorNicoleReed Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Nah, I'm good. It just hits really hard when you find something that fits this well. It's a beautiful piece. I'm definitely saving this one as a favorite!! Keep up the amazing work, you have a real flair for poetry. I can tell you've put a lot of effort into your work, and it's definitely paid off.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ah, I understand. thank you again. your words on my piece and my ability mean a lot
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TheWeeLad Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
Jesus this depressed me so good, But at this late stage of night the last thing i need is to delay my sleep so I will say this, I would have cried at this beautiful piece... but unfortunately I have lived this poem... more than once.... and so my well of tears is dry forever, thankfully though my well of gratitude is not, and you have mine. 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
"depressed me so good" interesting way of putting it; I like it. Ah, I know the feeling of crying so much you can't cry anymore.

Thanks so much for reading and leaving your thoughts :)
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Chardove Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Student Digital Artist
This is beautiful, and I know I can sort of relate to it. Very well written, with a nice delivery. I like this piece a lot. 
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad it resonated with you. Thank you so much!
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Chardove Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Not a problem ^^
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UniquelySane Featured By Owner Edited Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Quite enjoying the multiple meanings to the words you've written here :)

(And, umm, needless to say that I really enjoyed reading this piece, and it's one of those lovely ones that you can read multiple times and find something new each time.)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Glad you are enjoying it the layers :) Thank you so much.

(Ah, that's really good to hear.) 
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A-Lovely-Anxiety Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
here's to a beautiful piece that made me cry.

congratulations on the dd.  you deserve it and more.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aw :(

Thank you very much!
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cinnamonlover12230 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
when i saw you naked lol
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LoveYouSasuNaru Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's painfully beautiful. It brings back feelings and memories thought long since stored away.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, thanks so much. I hope those feelings and memories are good for the most part.
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LoveYouSasuNaru Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yes and no. It was beautiful none the less, though
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Scr1b3 Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:heart:Beautiful:heart:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! :)
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your-first-boyfriend Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful imagery. :la:
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you :)
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trashbutt Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2014
Wonderfully written, fantastic work.
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