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                                                 left.  
                                      you

when we finally felt right,                       turns out, we were wrong.

                                       I
                                                 fell.       

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lot of stuff going on here...not sure if it works.

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*SCFrankles Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello ^^ Just letting you know that I've used the title of your work in a piece of found poetry for #TheTitlePage. In my author's notes I have provided a link back to your deviation. (Well, of course you know all about this ^^")

If you want to see the finished poem, it's here: [link] .
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*Souzay Feb 5, 2013  Student General Artist
This reminds me a lot of e. e. cummings. I always admired the fusion of the aesthetics and words.

I can totally read this different ways to obtain different meanings that fit your overall theme. It's like reading both sides of the story at once.

Did you mean to create an image to represent a door? I mean I get the falling down leaving going the other way thing. Just wondering if there's more to the spacing.
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*0hgravity Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
that's pretty cool :)

glad to hear that. I wanted it to be a very interactive piece.

I actually hadn't! it does sort of look like a door. an unintended additional layer.

thank you very much ^^
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*Souzay Feb 7, 2013  Student General Artist
It certainly is :D

Ahhh or a fork in the road??

you're welcome :)
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*0hgravity Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah that was kind of my intention. two people going off on separate paths :nod:
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*Souzay Feb 7, 2013  Student General Artist
Yeah, totally got that right away... It's a great poem c:
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*0hgravity Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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*Souzay Feb 7, 2013  Student General Artist
:hug:
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*0hgravity Feb 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconbrohugplz:
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`HaveTales-WillTell Jan 22, 2013  Professional Writer
8-) Very nice. I appreciate not only the juxtaposition of right/left with right/wrong, but that "you left" is a left turn, and "I fell" is a drop.
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