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there is something in the 
curt conversation
of former lovers--
the sound and sight 
of mourning:

lingering gestures,
cutting eyes
away

trembling lips held 
barely steady with the
tips of teeth

the pain in the heart
is the pain in his jaw
he rubs rubs rubs
till red

raw
eyes
shut
tight

and there is
something in the way
former lovers stand together
outward, facing a burial
like strangers at a funeral



floated in on shower steam
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Souzay Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Student General Artist
"lingering gestures" ...really captures the moment when you still care for someone and fight the instincts to still want to hold that person when you know they're gone. Great poem. Dead on.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Sep 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think so too.

thank you very much!
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2013  Student Writer
I love the lines:

trembling lips held
barely steady with the
tips of teeth


I adore your imagery. :heart: It's just so tender and fragile. I love it. :)
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aw, thank you so much!
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Student Writer
Welcome! :)
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flummo Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student Writer
Ditto :devFuzzyHoser. This is lovely.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you ^^
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Perfectly worded; I never would've looked at what is left in the wake of lost love in this light. Nicely done, Gravity.
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0hgravity Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
ah,thank you very much!
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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